Wow, what a great story on so many levels, and beautifully written. I wasn't planning to spend time reading today, but your story drew me in and I couldn't stop. I may have to read it again, and I know it will stay with me. So many layers here.
Also, the part about not having her name on a building struck me. Just the other day I saw a social media post or some post on here, which I can't locate now, about how buildings used to be more beautiful and ornate because of patronage or governments putting lots of money into them, and how now, people donate to have their name put on a building, plus all those beautiful old buildings were built by exploited laborers.
So much more to your story than that, but it was interesting to see this come up again.
This is such a masterful piece of work. The excitement, the anticipation of physical and emotional release was so well written in your beautiful descriptions of the shop, Lisa, and Celina. Nice touch bringing in her husband and his inputs. Great work here, friend.
I read her as a "straight woman." Anyway, really brave and risky! My Substack APP is really wonky lately. Not sure where my other comment went but I admired the eroticism which was independent of a male if that makes sense. Congrats on it being in SumFlux.
Wow, what a great story on so many levels, and beautifully written. I wasn't planning to spend time reading today, but your story drew me in and I couldn't stop. I may have to read it again, and I know it will stay with me. So many layers here.
Also, the part about not having her name on a building struck me. Just the other day I saw a social media post or some post on here, which I can't locate now, about how buildings used to be more beautiful and ornate because of patronage or governments putting lots of money into them, and how now, people donate to have their name put on a building, plus all those beautiful old buildings were built by exploited laborers.
So much more to your story than that, but it was interesting to see this come up again.
Oh, that is just the medecine I needed!
I kind of felt like I should take more time to write a more thoughtful comment, as your story deserves it. But I couldn't wait. LOVE it.
This is such a masterful piece of work. The excitement, the anticipation of physical and emotional release was so well written in your beautiful descriptions of the shop, Lisa, and Celina. Nice touch bringing in her husband and his inputs. Great work here, friend.
Thank you, friend. It is risky. Write it way back in 2008 I think, but did a big revision for this post.
Wow! Great word pictures so I’m guessing you’re happy with the revision. Really well done.
I read her as a "straight woman." Anyway, really brave and risky! My Substack APP is really wonky lately. Not sure where my other comment went but I admired the eroticism which was independent of a male if that makes sense. Congrats on it being in SumFlux.
Thank you for reading and commenting so thoughtfully!
Very well written, and fascinating eye for details and sensory feelings. Eroticism and emotions are perfectly weaved together. Impressive.
Thank you so much!!! That makes my week.
My pleasure 🙌🏻